Fighting my way through another kill zone. Oh the pretties.
This is very hard: The paragraph is a mess but I love the sentences.
update: 4 scenes revised now. working on the 5th
I spend 5 mins, trying so hard to keep a sentence. Remove the sentence.
The paragragh works as though it was never there.
doesn't sound like much but it seems like they're should be some unrecoverable harm when removing one of the darlings...
update 7:11pm: new total 19. That's 12 total today.
